Globalisation leads to more trades internationally. Critics
argued that companies are choosing countries with weak environmental controls
to avoid high environment taxes are incorrect as a study shows it is mainly due
to the size of the local market. Studies found out that local operators pollute
more than foreign operated. Furthermore, the World Trade Organisation has been
blamed as it encourages demand in product that will cause pollution. Globalisation
has been pointed out to be the catalyst for pollution. Government has failed to
promote conservation and reforestation. Pollution within a country may
eventually become a global problem as chemicals can be dispersed through air
and water. The ill-effects of global pollution can be magnify by the media and raise
the awareness of the problem. People understand the threats of global warming,
which have the ability to hurt our economy and cause social problems similar to
the World Wars. With the green technology at our fingertips, we are not
utilising in fully to combat the problems. The rectifying of a non-mandatory
Kyoto Protocol is not effective to reduce the emission. On the other hand,
several countries have been committed to reduce the emission to avert dangerous
trends. The public policies have raised attention to internal audience on the
importance of preserving our environment. It is an irrefutable fact that the international
system is lacking the authority to solve the problems we face. The main issue
is unwillingness, or inability for the international body to exert authority
over these problems. Political power is still the only way to tackle the
problems caused by globalisation.
Hello Leslie
ReplyDeletePlease make the necessary changes. Also, you have numerous sentences which aren't linked so try and use more conjunctions between sentences and merge some of the shorter ones whenever possible. Gareth
Globalisation leads to more /trades internationally = word form x2, word order/. Critics (^) argued that companies are choosing countries with weak environmental controls to avoid high environment taxes are incorrect as a study shows it is mainly due to the size of the local market. Studies found out(red) that local operators pollute more than foreign operated (Foreign operated what?). Furthermore, the World Trade Organisation has been blamed as it encourages demand in product(Word form) that will cause pollution. Globalisation has been pointed out to be the catalyst for pollution. Government(Only one? If so, which one?) has failed to promote conservation and reforestation. Pollution within a country may eventually become a global problem as chemicals can be dispersed through air and water. The ill-effects of global pollution can be magnify(verb form) by the media and raise the awareness of the problem. People understand the threats of global warming, which have the ability to hurt our(What do you mean by 'our'?) economy and cause social problems similar to the World Wars. With the green technology at our fingertips, we are not /utilising in fully: reorganize this section/ to combat the problems. The rectifying of a(Wrong word) non-mandatory Kyoto Protocol is not effective to reduce the emission(Word form). On the other hand, several countries have been committed to reduce the emission(word form) to avert dangerous trends. The public policies have raised attention to (^)internal(?) audience on the importance of preserving our environment. It is an irrefutable fact that the international system is lacking the authority to solve the problems we face. The main issue is unwillingness, or inability for the international body to exert authority over these problems. Political power is still the only way to tackle the problems caused by globalisation.